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Summary:
story

Four guys -- One Murder.
One woman -- Two loves
Murder -- Love
When Worlds Collide


Categories: Fanfiction > Backstreet Boys
Characters: Group, Other
Genres: Angst, Drama, Romance, Suspense
Warnings: Death, Graphic Violence, Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 27 Table of Contents
Completed: No
Word count: 29598
Read Count: 10272


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Published:
07/17/08 » Updated: 12/10/09
Reviewer: mamogirl Signed
Date: 12/15/10 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

Really love this story so I'm hoping it will be update sometimes! You can't leave us with this cliffhanger!

Author's Response: Aw! Thanks for the review :O) -- I am definitely hoping to get back into gear and continue writing, especially this story, very soon. Life's been a bit busy lately... but no, I don't want to leave you all with a cliffhanger -- I HATE that! :P

Summary:

Brian Littrell and AJ McLean were not the type of men you’d expect to associate with one another. One was a music teacher and a family man; the other made his living in bars and tattoo parlors. Their paths sometimes paralleled, but never crossed… until fate altered the course of their lives. Through tragedy, the two men would meet… to bring justice to a life cut short.

Categories: Fanfiction > Backstreet Boys
Characters: AJ, Brian
Genres: Alternate Universe, Drama, Supernatural
Warnings: Death
Series: None
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes
Word count: 68460
Read Count: 10874


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10/14/08 » Updated: 09/01/12
Reviewer: mamogirl Signed
Date: 06/26/13 Title: Chapter 1: Brian (I)

One thing that I've always loved about your writing is the description: so well written that you could just picture the scene just like you're watching a movie. 

Another is how much understable are all the medical explanations, especially given the fact that I'm a foreign reader. 

I loved Brian's emotions, his struggle to come to terms to the fact that he's dying and that his only chance to live doesn't depend on him but he kinda has to hope for someone to die. Add on how he hates to depend on someone else and not being able to be there for his sonand be the father he always wanted to be. I just want to step inside the chapter and give him a big hug (hoping that I won't hurt him. lol)

 



Author's Response: Thanks so much, Cinzia! I was especially descriptive in this story. I remember I was reading "Salem's Lot" by Stephen King when I started it, and he is a very descriptive writer too, so I think his style influenced me with this one. I really appreciate what you said about the medical explanations - I'm so glad you could understand them! My goal is always to write that stuff so it sounds authentic, but also makes sense and doesn't sound like a medical textbook. I'm glad Brian's emotions came through - I love writing angst, but it's hard to know if it's too over the top or not enough. It's not like I've ever been in this situation, and I can't just look it up like I can the actual medical stuff, so the best I can do is try to put myself in his shoes and think about how I would feel. I'm glad you felt for him in this chapter! Thanks for your detailed review! I'm glad you picked this one to read, and I hope you enjoy the story! :)

Reviewer: mamogirl Signed
Date: 06/27/13 Title: Chapter 2: AJ (I)

Loved the introduction, started with the description of the city and ended up with the presentation of Aj. Leave it to him to be always the different one, even in an AU! lol

I loved how you still kept some real details about his past, with his fater leaving him when he was only a kid and how this fact is pushing him to be the best father he can be for his little girl. 

Jori and Aj seemed to be the perfect match, though she seems to be much crazier and rebel than him. A John Lennon's self-portrait as a tatoo? lol



Author's Response: Thanks! The beginning of this chapter is where I can really see the Stephen King influence I mentioned in my response to your last review; I usually don't take that much time to describe the setting. I really like this beginning, though. When I'm writing AU, it's important to me to keep as many real-life details the same as I can, aside from the Backstreet Boy thing. I still want this character to seem like the AJ we know, so he's still into music and tattoos and has that eccentric style we know him for. The character of Jori was actually inspired by my sister, and although Jori is an exaggerated version of her, I used a lot of true details. My sister is a huge Beatles fan and actually does have all those exact tattoos, including John Lennon's self-portrait and autograph on her shoulder LOL. It's actually really cute! She has no idea I used her in this story though LOL. Thanks for the review; I'm enjoying your reactions as you're introduced to the various characters!

Reviewer: mamogirl Signed
Date: 06/27/13 Title: Chapter 3: Becci (I)

Loved this chapter and, especially, Becci's internal debate. It's hard to think that your husband is going to die and all you want to do is to be by his side but you can't because someone has to work. 

It made me smile the part when she remembered how they met. And yes, I share her same idea about Brian: his sense of humor, most of the times, is just a mask to hide his insecurities. 

Glad that the pager went off. Amazing work as always. ^__^



Author's Response: Thanks! Becci is a character I put a lot of myself into. Of the four main characters (Brian, AJ, Jori, and Becci), she was the only one I could really relate to, so I gave her qualities that I have, like making her a teacher. It was fun to imagine Brian as a teacher, too, and write some of their back story. I'm glad you enjoyed that part!

Reviewer: mamogirl Signed
Date: 06/27/13 Title: Chapter 4: Jori (I)

Oh gosh, one drama after one. I love it! lol 

I love stories like this where every characters have its own voice so the reader can see the whole picture and not only certain fragments because there is only one pov. With Jori we learn about the issues both she and Aj have. 

Oh, hi Howie! You're an active role in the story! lol (I admit that sometimes I forget to add him in my stories lol)



Author's Response: This story has tons of drama! LOL I don't write many stories like this, with multiple points of view, but I really enjoyed doing it that way. It really helped me develop each character too, and I think they all came out stronger characters because of that. Originally I thought Brian and AJ were going to be the only guys in it, but I enjoyed being able to work in Howie, too. Nick and Kevin have small "cameos" later in the story. I like including all five if I can, even in an AU! I'm glad you're enjoying the drama and characters - thanks for the great reviews!!

Reviewer: mamogirl Signed
Date: 06/28/13 Title: Chapter 5: Brian (II)

Loved this chap!

Especially Brian's reflection of what it means being ready for an operation. You can't never be ready enough for something like that, though you know that it's something that it would make you feel better. But, at the same time, it's something that it could kill you because a lot of things could go wrong no matter what.

And the saddest thing is that the real Brian had to go through those thoughts.  



Author's Response: Thanks! I have never had surgery myself, but I imagine I would be scared even for something routine, which a heart transplant is anything but. You can't stop yourself from worrying about the "what ifs." What if something goes wrong? It breaks my heart whenever I hear Brian talk about his real surgery and how he cried before he went in. I'm just glad that everything went well and we have him here now!

Reviewer: mamogirl Signed
Date: 06/28/13 Title: Chapter 6: AJ (II)

Another amazing chap! And I love how this one and the previous are a sort of companions: in this we see the waiting part of an operation while in Brian's chap we had seen the situation from the patient's pov. 

So glad that both mother and daughter are well. 



Author's Response: Thanks! I planned it that way, so the two different storylines would compliment each other. Thanks for noticing!

Reviewer: mamogirl Signed
Date: 06/29/13 Title: Chapter 7: Brian (III)

Aw, what a beautiful chapter! *__*

First, I loved Brian's first part and the fact that you hadn't skipped the slow recovery. I hate when I read a story and the character is ready to jump and run after an operation. Really? lol So I loved how you've kept it realistic. 

And the scene when Brian heard his heart beating? One of the best scene I've ever read. 



Author's Response: Thank you!! You know I love writing medical drama, so I tend not to skip a lot unless it's really not important to the story. I will warn you that it does skip ahead later because the whole recovery isn't really the point of the story, but I did want to take my time with this scene. Thank you so much for the huge compliment about the part where he hears his new heart! I'm really happy with how that part turned out.

Reviewer: mamogirl Signed
Date: 06/29/13 Title: Chapter 8: Jori (II)

As I said before, I love how you're keeping the story realistic. Especially in this chapter, it would have been so easy to write how motherhood would been rays and shines when, most of the times, it isn't. Especially in Jori's case. Even though she isn't alone since she has Aj, I get why she's starting to feel like she has no one to lean orask for help. And you've captured so well her emotions. 

 



Author's Response: Thanks!! I probably do normally write about motherhood being rays of sunshine, but I wanted to go for more of the harsh reality of it in this story. It's hard enough to care for a newborn, but to do it after having major surgery - major surgery that you didn't want or plan for - that has to be incredibly tough! I don't know how women do it. I'm glad Jori's emotions were clear and made sense.

Reviewer: mamogirl Signed
Date: 06/29/13 Title: Chapter 9: Brian (IV)

Oh, things are getting mysterious. I like it!

Brian's dream is really strange, especially given his situation. As he explained, his son is at home with his mother so there's no need to be afraid. I get the feeling that it's something else the reason of the dream.

Loved and interesting the whole explaination about the working of the new heart. It doesn seem weird to expect your heart to react in a certain way and realize that it's not, it's slower. 

And the last thought. I don't want to be in Brian's position, knowing that you're alive because someone else has died. It would tear me apart. 

Amazing job! 



Author's Response: Thanks! I'm looking forward to your predictions from this point on because, you're right, this is where it starts to get mysterious. :) I read a memoir written by a heart transplant recipient while I was writing this story, and one of the things she talked about that I never knew before was how a transplanted heart is slow to react because it's no longer hooked up to the central nervous system. The way she explained it was that someone sneak up behind her and say "BOO!" and scare her, and she would still jump, but it would take a couple of minutes for her heart to react and start racing, long after she realized there was no danger. That has to feel weird. Thanks again for the review!

Reviewer: mamogirl Signed
Date: 06/29/13 Title: Chapter 10: Jori (III)

I'm glad she's asking for help. At least, she's trying.

I feel sorry for her, being only in the house and taking care of the baby without having no one to talk with. It's sad and it makes you feel really really lonely. So, it's no news that she's feeling so bad. Adding the fact that she is indeed bipolar... this combination doesn't sound too exiciting. 

Amazing chap! 



Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you're feeling sorry for Jori. This is definitely not an ideal situation.

Reviewer: mamogirl Signed
Date: 06/30/13 Title: Chapter 11: Becci (II)

Okay. Wait a minute. Lemon juice in the pasta? Beatles? These are Jori's tastes... 

Which means that Jori is Brian's donator? And she lives, or used to live (lol) in Ohio. 

This story is getting more and more interesting. 

 

I so understand all of Becci's fears. I would feel the same way if Iwas in her shoes. (and that's the same reason why I would ever want to be real Brian's wife: I would be anxious and worried everyday. lol) How can you stop being afraid that something bad might happen? Even ifthings go back to normal, a part of your mind will always worry no matter what. 



Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad it's getting more and more interesting for you! I think I would feel the same way as Becci, too. She was an easy character to write because I could step right into her shoes and imagine how I'd feel if I were in her position. I am definitely a worrier!

Reviewer: mamogirl Signed
Date: 06/30/13 Title: Chapter 12: AJ (III)

Mh... why do I have the feeling that it's like the calm before the storm?

Leave it to Aj to propose out of nothing. lol 

But the real question is: Did Howie survive the night babysitting Lucy? lol



Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm loving your reactions to the story! LOL It seemed like an AJ thing to do to decide to propose spur of the moment like that and not have a ring... but the whole mood ring just fit their relationship anyway. I've been re-reading this story along with you so it's fresh in my mind when I was respond, and it's funny how averse to babysitting Howie was, considering he has two little kids of his own now. I wrote this chapter last summer, but I actually started this story way back in 2008, before James was even born! He was fun to write that way, though LOL.

Reviewer: mamogirl Signed
Date: 06/30/13 Title: Chapter 13: Brian (V)

Can I say that I can totally see Brian doing a Valentine's card like that? lol It's amazing! lol And very very creative. 

These dreams are really freaking me out. Especially if I link them to the chanche that Jori's heart is Brian's new heart (and, by the way, this makes the narration even better because it seems like the two storylines are coming to the same point, even if totally different). 

Can't wait to find out what they means! 



Author's Response: Thanks! I thought it was cute LOL. I'm loving your speculation. I can't say too much because I don't want to give anything away, but there is definitely a point to these two separate storylines. They will come together at some point soon!

Reviewer: mamogirl Signed
Date: 07/01/13 Title: Chapter 14: Jori (IV)

I loved this chap. (Well, no surprise since I'm loving the story. lol).

Truth is that until now I've pictured Jori's parents as the bad ones, the ones who would always judge and not agree with everything concerning their daughter. Especially Aj. But here you've surprised me, keeping the story, as always realistic: from Jori's pov, they might be seen that way but you've managed to give a glimpse of the truth which is that, sometimes, parents seems to be the villains just because they want their children to be happy and have the best things in the world. 

So, I'm glad that Jori and her mom have been able to find a common ground. 



Author's Response: Thanks so much! I love what you said about Jori's parents and being able to see both sides of that story. Since I based Jori on my sister, I wrote her parents similar to my own parents and thought about how they would handle this situation. I'm glad you could see that, even if they're a bit old-fashioned and judgmental, they love Jori and want what's best for her.